Prepositions


Take a look at how many prepositions you use--words like "by," "for," "in," around," "through," "under," "over," "between" . . . Look especially hard at how many of these prepositions require nouns:
Such prepositional phrases can bog your writing down and make it dead by increasing the number of nouns in your sentences--and sometimes when we concentrate on nouns, we link those nouns together with weak, empty verbs.

1. First of all, I was of the opinion of most critics . . . [Better: First, I agreed with most critics . . .]

2. The quotation by Polson about friendship is stating that people make friends for their own benefit and to make themselves look good. [Better: Polson says people make friends because friends are useful . . . Friends can . . .]

4. The description by Norman Mailer of a prize fight illustrates graphically a fight between Paret and Griffith. [Norman Mailer graphically describes a prize fight between Paret and Griffith.]

5. Being in debt, to any extent, seems to be whatever men seem to want to avoid. [Better: People try to avoid debt.]

7. I agree with the opinion of H. L. Mencken. [Better: I agree with Mencken . . . or: Mencken is right.]

8. I am of the opinion that the issue of hunting is wide open for debate. [Better: Some people like hunting; but intelligent people like me think it's stupid and inhumane.]



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